My short-story (incomplete)

[DeathLich]

I created a little short-story during my free time between assignments at school during Digitools. It's not completed yet, so I'll show the final version in a thread if anyone likes it so far. It's not that good, because I have had to hide it from the teacher when I typed it and that I started it when I was younger. Well, tell me what you think of it. I vaguely remeber the story about a half-elf with no known family getting attacked by an army in a stand alone fight. Although if I give away any more I would be giving away too much of the plot. Any critisism is okay -complemetary or otherwise...

[Rob-hin]

Nice writing, one thing to keep in mind. Don't jump all over the place going from this to that and back again, keep it constant so you'll need less "********************************".

Cool stuf.