Life on Candlekeep - Discussion

[Luis Antonio]

Guys, anything and everything: Post it here. I'm not a very good storywriter, but you can help me out (specially on spelling issues and storyline). Please, Tell me if you like it...

or hate it...

*hugs*

[Chanak]

It's always difficult to write a story that's not in your native language, Luis. Sure, there's some errors, but I can follow what you're doing, and I think you are a good story writer. The written word can be ruthlessly demanding in the technical department, I fear. A good tale weaver, who can hold others spellbound with his story, may stall and sputter when putting it in writing. Over time, however, with practice and more practice (which means just doing it), your comfort will grow. When you begin to feel that comfort, your usage of written words will capture more of what is inside of you. It's a process...I look at stuff I wrote 4 years ago and cringe.

[Luis Antonio]

Well, my special effort in writing this here is cause I want to improve my english spelling habilities. The history has only a little bit to do with my expectations at all - xpt perhaps on Centauri.

Thanks Chanak, proud you answered.

[Chanak]

Myself, I have found that the flow of ideas in a story makes or breaks it, more than character development, background, great descriptive sentences, etc. It's the difference between "See Jane run. See Jane slip on a banana peel. See Jane have a headache" or "See Jane run like a gazelle from a hungry lion. See Jane have a headache because she slipped on an insiduously placed banana peel." I like the first example better, since it flows more smoothly. Not very flowery, but it registers more clearly with a reader than flowery words alone can.

[The Z]

Originally Posted by Chanak

I look at stuff I wrote 4 years ago and cringe.

I look at the stuff I write now and cringe

In all seriousness though Luis, I think you're doing a good job considering the story's not in your native language (as Chanak said). I mean, I'm pure blood Chinese, but I can't speak or write Cantonese at all even though I've had a few attempts to learn the language (which failed miserably). So learning enough to write a coherent story in another language is a feat in itself.

[Luis Antonio]

I'm surprised...

But yes, I'll face that as a challenge. And I'll read more. In english. To improve.

Damn, I'm happy with you answers, you dont know how much... My history makes sense...

I never been on an English school, you know...